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Sunset bleeds upon the sky
Reveals shades of a life
Scarring as it burns this disguise.

So long ago, I set sail
To find myself another way…
Another me…
Another life…
To find the promised paradise.

*
That was the day I lost myself.

The treacherous path led me astray
Turned in a gray, mortal way
My mind gasped for a breath of sanity
Finding refuge only in sweet tranquility

A path of wonders and tragedy
Heights of hope, depths of pain.
Of birth and death of illusion.
In the end, I'd find another me
Elsewhere

Days that set my soul ablaze

I turned to the cross, seeking answers
Trying to explain the wonders around
To escape this damned path, forever.
Shadows from behind are never to be found
Shadows from within are to be feared
On a day that sets your soul ablaze.

It was always there, deep, untouched…
So close, and so far away
The light that shone at the end
Lies deep inside.

Realization comes on this day
That sets my soul ablaze.

Beauty, power and serenity lie in us
They are there, for the eyes that can see.
Still, it takes darkness to see light
As it takes death to see life.

Cruel realization, on this day
I set my soul ablaze.

Sunrise bleeds upon the sky
Burns this disguise
And drowns me in light.

Will I now long for darkness?
:iconromanianbard:
Nothing more to say. Mi-a luat mult sa o scriu, in principal din cauza ca nu mai am atata timp. Sper sa va placa, eu unu-s mandru (oarecum) de ea.
Feel free to comment, accept critica daca-i constructiva.
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:iconananasul:
Minunat cum ai exprimat un amalgam de sentimente ceva mai greu de explicat.
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~RomanianBard Nov 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Merci, ma bucur ca ti-a placut. Un timp am fost convins ca poezia asta sau ce o fi va fi un esec, dar se pare ca nu.
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:iconananasul:
Plăcerea e de partea mea. N-ar trebui să te gândeşti la o reacţie din moment ce nu scrii pentru opinia publică. Dacă tu crezi că ai reuşit să-ţi clarifici o dilemă sau să exprimi ceva,nu te teme de eşec. În orice caz, dacă tot ai de unde să scrii, eu îţi zic să începi să te cunoşti mai bine şi să mai capeţi ceva încredere.
Succes în continuare!
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~RomanianBard Nov 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Da, aici chiar ai dreptate. In poezie de fapt e vorba si de cunoasterea de sine, acel paradis pierdut si cautat:D
Iti multumesc pentru timp si sfaturi, succes si tie:D Ai galeria draguta:D
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:iconananasul:
Cu plăcere, mulţumesc şi mulţumesc.
Am avut şi eu o poezie asemănătoare, doar că în română, şi ceva mai puţin cizelată, probabil pentru că a fost scrisă acum ceva timp, şi mi-am îmbunătăţit considerabil stilul, gustul şi critica (ba chiar şi auto-critica). Ţi-aş putea dacă vrei, dar nu-mi dau seama dacă e ceva care să fie luat în considerare.
Anyhow, have luck *chuckle*
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*analillithbar Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Love it. It's so much easier to discern the pinprick of light when only darkness surrounds.

:onfire:
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~RomanianBard Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
thanks for the appreciation, when I wrote the thing with light and darkness I somehow thought at the ones who think their life is only darkness, even though it's full of light, and that they should meet real darkness to realize the of presence light:D
Have a nice day :hug:
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*analillithbar Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I completely understand, I, too, have a few people in my life like that... they wouldn't know happy if it fell on their face from the heavens and wiggled. :giggle:

You have a great day too. Again, a wonderful read.
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